Madagascar
madatgascars
madatfastcars
madatfuriousfastcars
toofastwomadatgascars
immadatthatcar
mattatgascar
mattsagascar
mattsgascaristoofast
toofast
breakfast
madassgascars
madasshattercar
alicegascar
inwonderlandcashcar
wondercashcab
wondercashcabinet
aliceinwondercascade
cascadecairfreshener
You said that you thought you weren't very good at this, see I disagree. I feel like with this Modulart Method, it doesn't matter whether your piece makes sense or not. I really like this one. Especially the first stanza...the way you messed with the spelling of Madagascar was really interesting and surprising to read because I never knew what was going to come next. But, I don't think you need "Breakfast" at the end. It doesn't quite fit with the rest of the piece. I think you could change it to "mattsgascarisfast/toofast" and it would sound more precise...if you didn't want to get rid of "breakfast" you could change to "breakneckfast"...that could be interesting.
Also, with the second stanza, I like how you threw in the wonderland bit. It went off on a different tangent than I expected with Madagascar. But again, I am not sure you need "cascadeairfreshener" at the end. It was a bit confusing...if you changed it to "wondercashcab/wondercashcabinet/aliceinwondercage/madagascagecar"...that would take out the confusing (for me) cascade thing.
But I really liked this, I thought you did a nice job.
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