Response to Blog Week One

This is a response to Hannah's blog post here. The blog post covered an original post regarding the exercise from class where the lines were very jarring and kind of slammed up together. Very cool exercise.

Hannah's original post:

"A woman walks up the hill, talking on her cell phone, the click of her heels echoing down the alley. Purple-necked pigeons coo forlornly on the rooftop of the neighboring house. Thus, all beauty dissolves. Once as a child, I announced that green has an expiration date. Maybe we're all trees with four seasons. Maybe we're all in desperate need of life."

My Response:
"Hannah,
This is super awesome! I love the jarred nature of this piece-the way the pigeons are slammed up next to some dissolving beauty and the woman with the cell phone. The expiration date and the trees makes such a cool connection because green does change to death when the fall and winter hit. I really want to know where the desperation of life could go. How does that tie into dissolving beauty? How can the piece continue? Maybe not at the legitimate end of the piece, but connecting through the middles. I know the original prompt called for us to be jarring and disconnected, but now there's the exciting opportunity for you to piece a little more information. For instance, I'd love to know more about how this woman and the pigeons connect with dissolving beauty. I think that is such a cool instance to look at because one is very natural and the other represents a culture that is becoming more widespread: technology. How does beauty push through technology or how does technology engulf beauty? Those are some questions you can ask yourself as you continue on with this piece. Maybe it'll turn into an essay where you intermingle different paragraphs with this connective tissue, or maybe it turns into a poem where you just talk more in depth in the lines between. To me, I see this as a poem. Something very image rich and interesting. You're right there...I love it!"