This is an improv off of the piece "The J Car" by Thom Gunn. It's a heroic couplet and that intrigues me. I've never really tried to write one of these, and I think Gunn deviates from the form with the idea of the caesura in the middle of the line. So what I wanted to accomplish with the improv was the actual form: iambic pentameter, caesura in the middle of the line, ten syllables, aabbccdd rhyme scheme. I hope I did that right. I also loved the line "a love he might in full reciprocate."
A love he might in full reciprocate,
like love he might in part not try to hate.
Small between the crevices, final glances
and dances lie. The samba, lovers dance
through rising seams, through doors, through voices heard,
until we come and stop. But only blurred
to hold off hope until a love returns,
and sambas right then wrong: another's arms.
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