"Life sculpts niches in cracks and corners.
Sun
reaches street level only at mid-day.
Plants
grow lush and green shadowed
by
three stories each side of history.
Roots
decay pavement, carving
survival
between and below ancient granite
desiring
only possibilities of change."
This is what I posted in response:
"Joanci,
I think that these are really cool snip-its of images, but I can totally see this becoming a piece. What I think you could do is choose one or two: I like the plants and pavement, I think those two compliment each other in a different way. They are sort of reversals, one grows up and the other stays on the ground but grows out. Then, flesh these out. You have "plants grow lush and green"...okay, that's a start. What kind of plants? What other colors are there? Where do the grow out of? You go on to say "shadowed by three stories each side of history." That's intriguing. Whose history? Where are you? What happened during this history? How do the plants tell this story?
Then, what you can do is contrast this with the idea of the pavement, which instead of growing out is decaying. How does this embody the history that the plants are growing around? "Carving survival between and below ancient granite desiring only possibilities of change," what are those possibilities? This is again super intriguing to me...how does granite desire change? What or whose survival? I think if you create a distinct character and location and flesh out these images you could create something that would be a great piece for workshop and the portfolio."
I think that these are really cool snip-its of images, but I can totally see this becoming a piece. What I think you could do is choose one or two: I like the plants and pavement, I think those two compliment each other in a different way. They are sort of reversals, one grows up and the other stays on the ground but grows out. Then, flesh these out. You have "plants grow lush and green"...okay, that's a start. What kind of plants? What other colors are there? Where do the grow out of? You go on to say "shadowed by three stories each side of history." That's intriguing. Whose history? Where are you? What happened during this history? How do the plants tell this story?
Then, what you can do is contrast this with the idea of the pavement, which instead of growing out is decaying. How does this embody the history that the plants are growing around? "Carving survival between and below ancient granite desiring only possibilities of change," what are those possibilities? This is again super intriguing to me...how does granite desire change? What or whose survival? I think if you create a distinct character and location and flesh out these images you could create something that would be a great piece for workshop and the portfolio."
