Junkyard Quote Entry 2 (Week 7)

"You don't think I can love you. Now you've made your choice and you will regret it forever. All you will have is an empty heart and a chipped cup."
-Once Upon A Time

Junkyard Quote Entry 1 (Week 7)

"It happened right here…on the death dancefloor."
-Ghost Adventures

Free Entry 1 (Week 7)

So, using the response from Morgan and David, here is draft two:

I am a self proclaimed pack-rat...

Just like my Grandmother.
A hoarder of knowledge
and school supplies.
Each weekend
I open the door to my father
reminding me of the empty filing cabinet
backed up
against the blank white wall
with its supposed contents
carpeting instead, my closet floor.
Each day,
when questions
to which no one actually wants answers
are asked,
I am the one to respond
pulling and searching from me,
the filing cabinet,
with those discarded closeted files
scattered in piles,
filling the pre-frontal cortex
of my brain.

This made me stop and think for a second.

Reading Response Entry 1 (Week 6)

This is in response to Katie Chaple's Pretty Little Rooms. I like this piece because of the way that Chaple uses the triggering subject and the discovered/end subject. Hugo says that the triggering subject is the idea that you start with: for Chaple, it is the initial article that she read about the body being exhumed and finding that there were two different people in the tomb. That in itself is an interesting way to go about finding something to write about. I want to try that one day: find something random in the paper and write a piece about what it makes me think in regards to the people involved. But then, in the end the discovered subject is revealed to be the idea that the female body is a commodity for science. "Nobody asks: Whose body was not loved enough/ that her skull could travel like a pebble,/could be used to punctuate the line of a man's body?" I love the different connotations of the word "used." It could mean utilized, implement, fulfilled, or "used up," "abused." And then she uses "punctuate the line" and that could mean both the line of the skeleton (the woman's skull is the ending of the man's body) or a line of poetry (its the end of the poem).
These multiple meanings and multiple subjects are what I really enjoy with her poems. I want to utilize that idea in my pieces.

Peer Response Entry 2 (Week 6)

This is a response to David's Calisthenic:

Madagascar

madatgascars

madatfastcars

madatfuriousfastcars

toofastwomadatgascars

immadatthatcar

mattatgascar

mattsagascar

mattsgascaristoofast

toofast

breakfast

madassgascars

madasshattercar

alicegascar

inwonderlandcashcar

wondercashcab

wondercashcabinet

aliceinwondercascade

cascadecairfreshener

 

You said that you thought you weren't very good at this, see I disagree. I feel like with this Modulart  Method, it doesn't matter whether your piece makes sense or not. I really like this one. Especially the first stanza...the way you messed with the spelling of Madagascar was really interesting and surprising to read because I never knew what was going to come next. But, I don't think you need "Breakfast" at the end. It doesn't quite fit with the rest of the piece. I think you could change it to "mattsgascarisfast/toofast" and it would sound more precise...if you didn't want to get rid of "breakfast" you could change to "breakneckfast"...that could be interesting.

Also, with the second stanza, I like how you threw in the wonderland bit. It went off on a different tangent than I expected with Madagascar. But again, I am not sure you need "cascadeairfreshener" at the end. It was a bit confusing...if you changed it to "wondercashcab/wondercashcabinet/aliceinwondercage/madagascagecar"...that would take out the confusing (for me) cascade thing.

But I really liked this, I thought you did a nice job.

Peer Response Entry 1 (Week 6)

This is a response to Brittany's Junkyard Quote "Blue, in almost any shade, is a fugitive paint. (If you've ever owned a blue car or blue jeans, you know what fugitive means.)"
This quote is from that Primary Colors book. I thought the describe of blue as a fugitive paint was interesting."
I have a hard time understanding why blue was described as fugitive. This sounds like something someone would say while critiquing an art piece. That would be a really interesting set of dialogue if there was an art critic and maybe his or her significant other talking about a piece involving a lot of the color blue and the critic throws this phrase out and then the other person has to think about it. I am just stuck on the word fugitive and why the Primary Colors book described it as such, the dialogue would be a fun way for you to explain it.